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    dots Submission Name: Lioness dots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       My sister got into a bad fight with my mom over my sister's boyfriend.
    My sister lost the fight due to my mom threatening to disown her.
    I cannot find the right words to thank her for staying here, staying with me. She's what's keeping me sane.


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    dotsLioness dots
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    My sister... The lioness.

    She's strong
    Graceful
    Agile

    Lioness...
    You lost so much today...

    How can I say I'm sorry?

    As far as cats and dogs and further more lions and wolves go
    We're not supposed to get along.

    We fight
    Every battle possible
    It's in our blood
    It's our nature

    But lioness...
    We are best friends
    And I know I needed to let you fight the bear on your own...

    You fought to keep the one you loved...
    Not all battles are won...
    I'm sorry my sister

    Be brave

    You are

    A Lioness.




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      I like the encouragement in this, and the animal-spirit references generally lavished throughout the whole. We all need to be strong, and we don't always win... very lonely place to lie down alone, but having someone watching over us as we heal is a beautiful thing. Your sister is very lucky to have you there for her.
    | Posted on 2010-05-09 00:00:00 | by LucyStarr | [ Reply to This ]


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