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    dots Submission Name: Only The Sound of Breathingdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsOnly The Sound of Breathingdots

    Sliding third dimensional
    The numbness seeps out of the walls
    A trick show horror festival
    Of a raging silence, heard before

    And there in the vacant passage
    Where the world glides by it all
    Strangers than the strangest
    The bullets proof of isolation

    Only the sound of breathing
    The voices whispering to yourself
    Only the steady trembling
    Of the arms you long to feel

    But there’s nothing in the sound of smoke
    The heavy thumping of a heart
    No footsteps in the doorway
    No words you can impart

    No one left
    When the knot is cold
    Bitter cracked in emptiness
    Pulls the noose around your neck

    Only the sound of breathing
    Those voices whispering to yourself
    Only the steady trembling
    Of the arms you once felt

    And are you really living
    Just the meter of a clock
    The day will fall, the night will come
    So to, with the darkness of these dreams

    Pawned away your oxygen
    Rushed against the storm
    The figure in the distance
    Walking onward all alone

    Only the sound of breathing
    The voices cracking inside yourself
    Only the steady trembling
    Of the arms you no longer feel

    Footsteps from the doorway
    As the numbness seeps out of the walls
    Walk the walking death within

    Submitted on 2010-05-08 16:14:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I find it very artistic with it's form, delivery and especially it's honesty.This is the feeling some ppl get and keep in the closet.You exposed it so on point.I like this write, it'll go in the box for me.Sometimes something can be totally true when it's written in dark fashion.Keep up those great thinkin processes.
    | Posted on 2010-05-09 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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