[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Dreamy Nightsdots

    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 464
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 985

       dream dream away

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsDreamy Nightsdots

    I lie my head on a feather pillow,
    Exhausted from a another day.
    I close my eyes to encourage slumber,
    I slowly drift away...

    I imagine myself in the night sky,
    Beside the stars I dwell.
    As they twinkle little lullabies,
    Like soft, silver bells.

    The sky is dark, yet luminous,
    With lovely shades of purple and blue.
    I could feel the light breeze against my face!
    Towards the moon I flew.

    Glittering, Sparkling, Full and Bright,
    I cast a lone shadow on her surface.
    I spot a comet on the horizon,
    Streaming tails of scarlet lace.

    I ice skate along Saturn's rings,
    So smoothly I glide,
    I come across a puffy cloud,
    Upon the fluffy mass I lie...

    *RING RING RING* is all I hear,
    As those peaceful images drift away.
    Oh well, I guess I should wake up,
    And get on with another day...

    Submitted on 2010-05-08 20:24:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      I needed that. I was getting worried and this put me
    part way to right.
    | Posted on 2011-10-07 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    AI written by poetotoe
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Linger written by saartha
    Every..... written by jackz
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Push written by JanePlane
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    written by Daniel Barlow
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]