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    dots Submission Name: Dreamy Nightsdots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
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    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       dream dream away


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    dotsDreamy Nightsdots
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    I lie my head on a feather pillow,
    Exhausted from a another day.
    I close my eyes to encourage slumber,
    I slowly drift away...

    I imagine myself in the night sky,
    Beside the stars I dwell.
    As they twinkle little lullabies,
    Like soft, silver bells.

    The sky is dark, yet luminous,
    With lovely shades of purple and blue.
    I could feel the light breeze against my face!
    Towards the moon I flew.

    Glittering, Sparkling, Full and Bright,
    I cast a lone shadow on her surface.
    I spot a comet on the horizon,
    Streaming tails of scarlet lace.

    I ice skate along Saturn's rings,
    So smoothly I glide,
    I come across a puffy cloud,
    Upon the fluffy mass I lie...

    *RING RING RING* is all I hear,
    As those peaceful images drift away.
    Oh well, I guess I should wake up,
    And get on with another day...




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