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    dots Submission Name: Better Bewitched or Forever Captive ?¿dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 350
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsBetter Bewitched or Forever Captive ?¿dots

    Nothing but disaster
    Coiled about her coy tweak
    A glinting eye
    Beckoning with a subtle fever

    I walk over

    The petrol scent of some sexual encounter
    Already singeing the air between us
    Rushing with energetic wisps
    The music
    Flaunted her cleavage
    With a wicked trespass
    That hid
    Her smile

    A burden of clothing surrounded her
    This adrenalin calm of mine
    Strips her naked
    As I seem suspended
    By the wayward curl
    Of midnight black
    Which hung such wanton promises
    Upon her cheek

    Disaster, disaster
    My blood wails to me
    Disaster of beauty
    Crashing at my senses
    Full force Flamenco and castanet’s
    The gypsy dream
    Of open legs

    But Englishmen don’t know how to dance
    We stand by
    As the perfume of movements
    Assault us with bliss
    In too many sensual, sexual moments
    To drown each of them in
    Lost reminders of another world

    Carmina De Santa Viva

    She said her name was
    Though I suspected
    Other pronouncement
    Along the lines of Delilah
    To the dark
    Disaster, disaster my pulse keeps telling me
    Should I walk into one night
    Of complete
    And spend it with her

    To be mangled and crushed
    And held captive
    To a beauty
    I would be forever more
    The prisoner of

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      Pussy, perhaps?
    I've heard of worse prisons.

    This is freshly seductive, strangely sensual, and not the least bit fishy... I enjoyed it immensely.

    I think I shall take it home with me and hang it on my wall, too, if you don't mind.
    | Posted on 2010-05-09 00:00:00 | by LucyStarr | [ Reply to This ]

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