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    dots Submission Name: What We Can't Have.. Part Twodots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWhat We Can't Have.. Part Twodots
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    No use pretending
    the ground between is not common at all
    rather
    a farce
    pagan ritualistic love
    made only for us masochists to indulge
    Easy now
    holster that narrow finger
    with the bitten back nail bed
    I blame you
    you blame me
    we accuse in a twisted bloody game
    caged
    stuck together
    fighting to part
    No use pretending
    the end was years before
    we agreed to perpetuate
    you the fool
    and I the foolish
    No use pretending




    Submitted on 2010-05-09 22:56:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...the beauty and melody
    of angelic eyes became ash
    as the light expired
    and the hardness of stone
    like a flint, flashed fire
    as the rage at its heart
    evolved new desires...
    | Posted on 2014-11-04 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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