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    dots Submission Name: Alliteration Homeworkdots
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    Author: cyberpoet
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 28/18/22
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Alliteration- Matching beginning constanants.
    Choose 5 different beginning sounds and write a sentence or two to create alliteration.
    Tell me your general thoughts and idea. Add on or come up with your own i'll credit you on the website if I use your idea's. Thank you for the time.

    Special thanks to Brandon Joyner for some of the idea's as well I liked them.


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    Death's darkness destroys dreams in a damningly demented way. The savage soul eater slithers sleekly by, souless as the spirits he reaps. Dealing disaster interests this devoid deity for destruction brings his desolance to delight




    Submitted on 2010-05-10 13:13:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's easy to become so lost in the sound of words that their collective meanings are lost. I think it might be best if you made lines of poetry from the sounds that you've experimentally joined together here:

    Death's darkness destroys dreams
    in a damnably demented way

    The savage soul eater sleekly slithers by
    as soul-less as the stripped husks he reaps

    Dealing disaster interests this deviant psuedo-deity
    for destruction brings his desolate dreams delight

    Just some thoughts on your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2013-06-29 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoy alliteration and this piece in particular. Sometimes it's hard to make sense out of people's attempts to create meaningful work through this method but yours is loud and clear :) I don't have anything to add that bkj43 hasn't already said lol I have an alliteration piece of my own called "Midnight Moon's Mixology" check it out if ya want, if not its all good. Thanks for posting!

    All2rest
    | Posted on 2010-05-12 00:00:00 | by all2rest | [ Reply to This ]
      How about starting it, "Death's darkness destroys dreams in a damningly demented way"? I don't know, I kind of like the sound of it. Then the next line could start, "A savage soul eater that slithers sleekly by..." I do like the part that you tacked in on the end of the second sentence, a nice little touch. Is "Disaters" supposed to be Disasters? How about "Dealing disaster interests this devoid deity for destruction brings his desolance to delight" or "...brings delight to his desolance." Anyway, just some suggestions, this piece really got me thinking, haha.

    bkj
    | Posted on 2010-05-10 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ]


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