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    dots Submission Name: Gone Too Fardots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsGone Too Fardots
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    Not long after I met you
    I started to think about you
    And then I thought about us
    Though too good to be true

    But some reason God smiled
    He made my life bliss
    I had more love for you than
    I knew what to do with

    But we fought, quite alot
    We never saw eye to eye
    And you'd say something hurtful
    And I would make you cry

    But don't go there
    Don't you cross that line
    You will regret it
    And you won't be mine

    And, of course you did
    And I'd forget others for much less
    But I couldn't stay mad at you
    You were always what was best

    And so we stayed in love
    And we stayed together years
    But life was filled with stress
    We were headed for all our fears

    But don't you dare cross that line
    'Cause I'll be gone if you do
    Don't you go that far
    This time I will be through

    And I was, for about five minutes
    And then I forgave you again
    But leaving you forever
    Well, I'd die for that sin

    And this is how we were
    But look at where we're now
    But I've still never given up
    I'll win your heart somehow

    So long is as you don't cross that line
    When you do I'll be gone
    If you hurt me like that
    I'll leave you everlong

    But now and again
    I think about you
    And then I think about us
    And I know what I'd do

    'Cause with you there is no line
    Hurt me all the ways you do
    And I'll stand by crying
    But have only love for you




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