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    dots Submission Name: Footstepsdots
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    Author: gothgirl101
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pelham,AL
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 10/41/17
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 493
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 391



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    dotsFootstepsdots
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    Dear little child
    Wherever you go
    I'll never forget you
    That's what i want you to know
    You may still be tiny
    but you won't be forever
    Just follow my footsteps
    And i'll take you wherever
    You'll grow to be smart
    Very smart indeed
    But this you won't be forever
    Is a real tiny seed.




    Submitted on 2010-05-11 13:03:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is lovely, cute, poignant and just an excellent write! I loved it! Short but pithy and potent. A fine, fine piece of work!! michael
    | Posted on 2010-08-30 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice, like an arrow the heart good. It is just that amazing. The passion put into it and the sense of foreverness, breathes a life into it. Mine aren't good because my passion burns out. Good work comes from the heart and I feel the echos of passion marked on this poem.
    | Posted on 2010-08-25 00:00:00 | by 13thprotector | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, Savannah this poem is really a very nice poem. You tried to write a free verse but you wrote a blank verse, ie. you use no rhyme (abcbdefegheh) but I can feel a soft rhythm in the poem, which is really great, the only drawback in your poem is the lack of the figures of speech, look in "follow my footsteps" it is a metaphor, but it seems to me that it is an old one, ie. it is a cliché. What I want to say is that you are a really talented poet all you need to do is that you will need to improve your use of the figures of speech.
    | Posted on 2010-05-26 00:00:00 | by Duke Medhat | [ Reply to This ]


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