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    dots Submission Name: I will ... alwaysdots
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    Author: Oracle
    ASL Info:    24/ F /NY
    Elite Ratio:    4.63 - 423/313/46
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsI will ... alwaysdots
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    Sleep well child of my heart

    your song has been heard

    you've lived the lives of many wives and sowed your oats wild

    only time will tell if you will reap the sorrow of your giving


    weeping and sadness, tears of crystalline hate

    why did you have to change

    would I had the days of yesteryear the child of another, one of lesser fears


    I loved you and will also stand by, give advise and to be good to you, I will always try

    when nights are sad, when days are blue, regardless of the situation

    I will always love you




    Submitted on 2010-05-11 23:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      kinda choppy sappy... but hey feedback more than compliment... um did there ever be a resolution...
    | Posted on 2010-05-11 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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