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    dots Submission Name: Sumo in Velvet...dots
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    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSumo in Velvet...dots
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    Pinky nail… extended… laughing like a dog…
    Recoiled as the cloaked in joy for shames dismay…
    Arms length not enough… to reach Cambodia ….
    Pow…
    Loaded like a catchphrase from a foreign language…
    Anger from the couple next door…
    Back in the alley of the liquor store so its ok…
    Dumb ass bitch she says and he drives off…
    The world around… we … is it a we…
    Did she find an ear ring was it?
    Something not in her possessions and or her memory…
    Or is it a plant… like a dropped square of cloth…
    Woe is a together thing…
    Jethro Tull and psychosis…
    Like being bear hugged?
    Would they not have the battle of the sexes figured out…
    I am a dandelion …
    I used to play among small hills of them…In quiet side streets…
    Places across tracks… ancient and haunted…
    Who wants to sell out their memories… even if bothered?
    Another car door slams…
    The music sours…
    Nirvana Breed…




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