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    dots Submission Name: in the desert to live...dots
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    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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       mythic... translation of the distortion...


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    dotsin the desert to live...dots
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    Fuzzy dice…
    Missing from the rearview…
    Salt flat… and the red winged ant… screaming when pinched…
    At the light it attracts to… out in the wasted…
    The desert under late nights… on the side of the road…
    Piercing and chilling…
    The incense and the thought of a methodical miracle…
    The haze… and drag rock…
    A spliced together egomaniacal facing of the self…
    A dip in sin..
    Extremity before industry….
    And the zombies … they don’t like holy things… but really … that is monster territory…
    Synthesized construct… to avoid god…
    Ha…
    Can’t you hear your diplomacy roaring in the mix of past playlist…
    All your lives soundtrack never or seldom enough played over…
    Like entertainment…
    Most of you have never seen the original invention of a record…
    Interruption…
    A record Is a hand held device..
    And Archimedes invented perpetual motion with a useless corner toy…
    Circles my friend all in the circles…
    And the Truth shall set you free…




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      hey the desert is a dry heat...and vultures are only circles from our death there... somehow looping in the sky over the convection of the oasis...
    | Posted on 2010-07-22 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      comon!
    "your lives soundtrack" ... leo... you cant use that one! please do not! its cheesy.
    poem sounds a bit like ... thoughts when i'm stoned. but nothing that really belongs together, except thats its all confusing. shouldnt be a quest to find out what you mean, should it?
    type: "i am dead inside"... haha nice one.

    sorry if i sound mean.

    ....
    your lives soundtrack.
    | Posted on 2010-07-10 00:00:00 | by Jimi James | [ Reply to This ]


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