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    dots Submission Name: The Sun's Raysdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 666
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    dotsThe Sun's Raysdots
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    A touch of orange,
    A tad of yellow.
    The sun rises,
    For a beautiful hello.

    The blaze of light,
    Storming the sky.
    Bringing about,
    The most beautiful lie.

    Gorgeous at dawn,
    Stunning at dusk.
    A wave of iridescent clouds,
    Bring a rosy blush.

    Holding your hand,
    Till the break of night.
    Watching calmly,
    As the stars take flight.

    We point out names,
    Of constellations in the sky.
    And dream of one day,
    Maybe being able to fly.




    Submitted on 2010-05-12 04:51:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      bringing about the most beautiful lie
    is damn skippy

    | Posted on 2010-05-12 00:00:00 | by MINTPATTY | [ Reply to This ]


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