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I've been thinking...


Author: Imadjinn
ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 340 /348 /146
Words: 295
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I've been thinking...



They say that two's company
And that three is a crowd.
I say that's bullshit,
because the truth is that I felt far more compainionship
in a room of three
than I've been feeling in a room alone with you.

You see, I've been thinking about tigers lately
maybe that's a nonsequiter.
nonesense, really.

Tiger's stripes, actually.
That's what i've been thinking about.

You know when you're looking at a tiger
your eyes notice it's stripes before anything else.
Scientests say that's natural defense.

I use my coat, an extra shirt, and if I'm feeling real lonely
a pair of sunglasses.
They keep me safe from bullets, knives and harsh words.

You see I've been thinking about Alaska, lately.
whoops, there was another nonsequiter.
More nonesense.

The tilt of the earth actually.
How if you get high enough north,
then you get thirty days of night,
and thirty nights of day,
on different ends of the calendar.

I wonder if I've taken some metaphysical trip to alaska,

I've been thinking about waltz lately.
Now I know this one makes sense.

I want to hear a 3/4 time piano more often.
I want to move in a triangle.
step-one-two step-one-two step-one-two step-one-two.
now I'm getting all emotional.
Dancing does that to me.

So I've been thinking about a crowd lately.
and I've been thinking about...
why I wanted someone around in the first place.

you see, I can't even pin down exactly what it is I'm thinking.
Much less what I want.

This crazy writer's ADD is worse than a writer's block.

and so I guess I'm thinking...
Maybe it's not time to point a poem in anyone's direction
quite yet.





Submitted on 2010-05-14 01:33:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I did enjoy this, thank you for the skip-along-the-neurons-with-the-laser-light play of words in this. It's realistic in it's flitting topic, "I've been thinking about..."
is quite wonderfully penned, it works very well with the content. It was random and flighty, just like restlessness and the changing-channel thoughts that flood an overactive mind. Very well done.

I like your name... djinn is the perfect thing to be. I'm working at the Becoming. I just need a bottle that's easier to slide in and out of, maybe...
| Posted on 2010-05-17 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
  Who says everything has to line up and match?
I did not get that memo. I have a really different
style of writing, so I may be off but i felt you were misunderstood, afraid to show your real self. It seemed you were hiding from a overbearing soul.
I'm probably all wrong, please let me know so I can do a re-read!!!!

Mistie,
The Kidd
| Posted on 2010-05-15 00:00:00 | by mistiekidd | [ Reply to This ]
  i love the nonsequiter nonsense parts because that is exactly how my brain works.. i can start on one subject and end up at the completely opposite end of any and every spectrum possible.

and thats okay with me

because usually i can follow the degrees of seperation im just not very good at articulating them and so i end up somewhere about 5 minutes before everyone else does and as a result they think im mad when really they just dont have enough dots or resources to join them

so i really like the tigers and alaska and the waltz... i really like the directions youve taken this piece and the way it all makes sense in the end even if you dont have a brain that works like this...
| Posted on 2010-05-14 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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