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    dots Submission Name: GOD FORGOT (edit)dots
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    Author: nameless_nobody
    ASL Info:    18 in a few days.
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 333/421/67
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       i just quickly edited this so some coments might not make sense. i just changed a few lines to improve flow or make more sense and put in some punctuation shit. i think its better now but any coments or re-coments are welcome.


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    dotsGOD FORGOT (edit)dots
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    God made the earth,
    God made its soul,
    But god got old,
    And could not cope.

    Everything was made,
    By glorious god,
    But god got bored,
    And god forgot.

    God left earth,
    In human hands,
    Now the earth,
    Barely stands.

    Forests chopped,
    You got your wood,
    Industry stands,
    Where trees once stood.

    Wars raged,
    Graves dug,
    Lives lost,
    Your evil drug.

    Fight for peace,
    Start a war,
    Keep us rich,
    Keep them poor.

    God got bored
    God forgot,
    Now earth crumbles,
    We're left to rot.




    Submitted on 2004-07-25 07:37:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Yes yess.... My evil plan is working. MUhahaMuhaha!!" cackles the corprate demon.
    "I like your poem very much. God is dead and i'm ahead." "I think your poem is very true."
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by disillusion | [ Reply to This ]
      i know i commented on this a loooong time ago but in re-reading it, it made me think of a stand-up routine where the comic talks about God getting bored and moving on... he says that Creation was like God's third-grade science project. i'd like to think he's still around though...
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem!
    I like the topic and I like the rhyme scheme you used... I have now read 3 of your poems and I have really enjoyed all I've read - you are a very talented writer, keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2005-04-24 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wars raged,
    Gaves dug,
    Lives lost,
    Your evil drug.

    awesome possum. i like this alot. its absolutely cool. It really does seem that way sometimes doesn't it. Thanks for sharing. i wonder if he really did forget?
    Pryncess
    | Posted on 2004-09-15 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      Feel like crying when i read it. its beautiful and though i do not believe that God forgot but i think that yes it does sometimes feel like he has abandoned us.beautiful write.i like it without the punctuation coz it feels raw and unyeilding.
    | Posted on 2004-09-07 00:00:00 | by whyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Very depressing, especially to someone like me, I think God still there. I know he is. i know i know..*slap the closeminded [censored]* Yea yea, I believe what I believe, but I liked the style of the poem. I like short lines. Try some punctuation. It really helps how it reads.
    love love, reid kat
    | Posted on 2004-08-09 00:00:00 | by reid kat | [ Reply to This ]
      personally i don't believe that God has forgotten us, but i can definitely appreciate what your poem is about. it is a sad state of affairs what humanity has done to this earth. i personally think we could have heaven right here on earth if we tried. but human beings were given free will and egos to boot. now look what we've done?! i liked your poem.
    | Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I adore this poem! I love the creativity. It's not a new idea, nor a new perspective yet you managed to make it perfectly original. The representation of it all is great. Perfect poem for the angsty Atheist. ;)
    | Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by Shuurinakisame | [ Reply to This ]
      This the most awesomest poem(if that's a word!lol) Because it's so debatable and so...well I can't think of the word...but this could be two thigs 1. the most brillliant write of all and 2. the poem of the century that has the most religious people pissed off, and that's awesome thing a writer can do. I'm religious and those two things popped into my head while reading this. This was, undescribably beautiful!
    | Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by Cydsecret | [ Reply to This ]
      i belive in god but think that this is very good i loved the lines
    wars raged
    graves dug
    lives lost
    your evil drug

    fight for peace
    start a war
    keep us rich
    keep them poor

    god got bored
    left us to rot
    now earth crumbles
    look what we got

    great job i loved it lia
    | Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. My believe may differ, but I found this piece very interesting. Everyone makes mistakes, nobody's perfect. The thing I love most about this poem is how you're saying god's not perfect, he forgot. It shows a very humane side of an icon of worship. very good!
    | Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by Cai | [ Reply to This ]


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