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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 647
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1005



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    life had become a series of erasers
    tracers
    and half faded memories like her reflection in a koolaid jar

    she posted her thoughts in a journal
    formed in three pages everyday
    with a cover that read
    "make time for the quiet moments. God speaks in whispers"

    Her dreams foreshadowed events in time
    and her feelings were never far away

    life was becoming
    more of a present moment
    and she was relieved to watch old things go
    and throw away clothes she had always been attached to
    and sell paintings she would never give away

    tasting food less now
    and eating more

    appetite not so large until about two in the afternoon
    when there wasn't god bless any food

    waking up without being tired at five in the morning
    and four thirty on fridays

    not just a habit
    but a leap of faith






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