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    dots Submission Name: Baltimore Shoredots
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    Author: RisingSon
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 7/79/52
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 484
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       For some reason I'm thinking mariachi.

    very not finished. just needed to save it 'fer the weekend.


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    dotsBaltimore Shoredots
    -------------------------------------------


    They did not know the way
    the month or the day
    only vaguely sketched lines
    on a napkin

    there were no guiding lights
    no end in their sights
    for them to reach

    when he first took her hand
    that day on the sand
    and quietly asked her the question

    and caution he threw
    into wind that they knew
    was blowing in every direction

    It was all
    just
    a poem that never existed

    It was all
    just
    a song that would never be sung

    He would fall
    so
    hard when she stepped close and kissed him

    couldn’t speak up for silence
    these words never said
    still they stung



    They did not see the pain
    the clouds or the rain
    only brightly lit skies
    in their future

    there were no lightning storms
    no menacing forms
    in the distance

    when she captured his heart
    and gave him a part
    of her soul, they could not hear the humming

    of the train on the tracks
    they never turned back
    though the whirlwind had always been coming

    It was all
    just
    a poem that never existed

    It was all
    just
    a song that would never be sung

    hand in hand
    they
    walked out and into the mist then

    sealed their fate evermore
    on the Baltimore shore
    and were done




    Submitted on 2010-05-14 15:26:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i smiled when i saw lyrics as the category.
    i hope youre not messing with me lol.
    [sometimes category assignment cannot be taken seriously... i know of several incidents when people have labelled their psycho i hate you and everyone you know pieces as childrens stories...]


    i know nothing about baltimore. i dont even know if i could locate it if given a map. all i know about baltimore is from that chatanooga choochoo song and thats only read a magazine and then youre in baltimore. not so helpful.

    the opening three lines of this piece are wonderful.
    i am more than convinced that you would have me right to the end of the song based on those three lines and the image they create.
    i like how you have time and maps and vagueness... sometimes there is no real game plan

    and sometimes the wind does blow in every direction which makes i love you echo when its not sposed to and whisps away other confessions that were meant to be heard...

    i really wanna hear this.
    yup.
    you really need to find a microphone!
    | Posted on 2010-05-16 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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