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    dots Submission Name: What life had me learn.dots
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    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 330
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Me had to learn something but alas not really me still learning...


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    dotsWhat life had me learn.dots
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    What life had me learn.
    Living is never without lessons-regardless of vast resources no man can live in absolute isolation for long.
    A sound education from the ivory tower is never solely academic wins excellence in academics promises but never guarantees-something more is required.
    Life's whispered promises are patience anchored with life purchase is without warranty . Its always hard for me to love totally a pretty woman,knowing that beauty is not skin deep,exactly why its never wise to be inspired by booty or beauty,but know a good head is always enough but never satisfies the eyes-windows of the soul (searcheth continually for its candy)
    Life has taught me that communication with an intelligent female has its rewards even without fleshy intimacies-of its rewards ask me not! Am not that philosophical.
    Life had me learn that formal education dispells superstition,but little education makes one gullible.
    Life had me know there really are things that go bump in the dark-things that evade explanation,exceed imagination.
    Life had me learn that kind words never do but gentle tone and actions toll in all eternity like the sabbath bell-to those who have heard it,you have'nt? That makes two of us!
    Life has taught me that contentment is temporary,all round satisfaction is elusive like a snow leopard-or yeti if you like!
    While life taught me was easily distracted,but never say me learned nothing! Cause them distractions were lessons in themselves-what distracted me life! And its good things.
    Like an eager student Life had me learn that forever! Friends seldom are,
    Forever enemies never stay
    But change,tax,intermarriage occur repeatedly.
    Life has taught me patience is worth courting-for soon me get me much awaited turn.
    Poor english is not wisdom deficient-listen and even you would learn aplenty.
    Life had me learn, conflict is minimal when bonded with the right spouse-minimal not extinct.










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      all this is so true...and yes, even being a teacher...i strongly profess...education is never soley academic...when i was in college as an undergrad, i think i learned much more outside the classroom...

    i like the part about women too...love the intelligent woman...intellect is so sexy...

    this piece is filled with truths and has a nice consistent flow to it...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      You my friend have the fluid and beautiful speech patterns of originality. It is exactly what literature lacks, im not blowing smoke up your ass as we americans say, im being honest."Life's whispered promises are patience anchored". That my friend is what writing in my opinion is about, the interplay of words and the way they come off of the tongue, the concept itself is wonderful, fools dont make concepts, they just copy and try to improve, you are no fool. Some of the lines in here are remiscent of 18th century english poetry, like Byron, or Shelley, it is succinct and momentous. A fine piece. There is a line from the beginning of Fahrenheit Four Fifty One by Ray Bradbury , i forget who he quotes but i remember the quote, it is " If life gives you lined paper, right on the side." or something along those lines, many writers forget this, they try to compact there dreams into stanzas, to often this limits us.

    Thank you for your work,
    Colby BRadshaw. Texas. 2010
    | Posted on 2010-05-24 00:00:00 | by colbybradshaw | [ Reply to This ]


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