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    Author: xxiknownowxx
    ASL Info:    16/F/GA
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 128/41/40
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I had opened a dozen blinds before this...
    (...impossible...)
    An unbelieveable occurance raked by unknown figures...
    Danceing during the rainstorm. Wearing
    bags as their benevolance.
    But what's this?
    ...speak...?
    You spoke?
    Oh, a distant melody that I had unthought of for
    (many years and further on)
    But now, a persistant knock on the door of insistantcy...
    know that box was there.
    (Why, it was there the whole time!)
    I can't believe you still sleep with blind eyes and naked hands.
    Exert your fragrance.
    (A fragrance...Love?)
    No.
    You've passed the bricks without the basket to hold.
    (A hammer perhaps?)
    Darling, you've a mind of your own.




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