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    dots Submission Name: Eye of The Needledots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsEye of The Needledots
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    Knots in the grimy Reebok trainer
    Running shoe
    Hits the blue, reflecting puddles
    In the sky
    That taste of oil and grit
    The splash of desperation with
    A million angels
    Dancing on a pin head

    Knuckles scrunched in tarmac
    Red the dissolution of
    Or in the face of brilliant white
    Did that taste of blood, ignite
    The aftermath

    The roar of ruin
    Still hits the blue
    With a million angels

    And as the heavy head, to cold cheek laid
    For want of parched and desert winds
    To grind into oblivion
    Time spent in Hieroglyph
    With the centuries of cement
    Shatter and ricochet, their secret
    Cough on the taste of oil and grit
    A million angels
    Dancing on a pin head

    Rusted shells, the once phallic symbols
    Heard only where the ally moans
    A camouflage of poetry
    Graffiti
    On their walls

    Between the brick
    The wet pleading fingers slip
    And there is no one there, at all

    The celebration has begun
    The vaunted towers of the sun
    Stand crowfoot and racked before the dawn
    Footless lay shaken to their foundation
    Where the wail of children
    Carry the hymn
    Of a million angels
    Dancing on a pin

    And the wood, which was held so blessed
    By nails
    To hammer words into those veins
    And break them
    In the fallen craters, stand

    Hypnotic, the loose leaf scattered
    The voices of God
    To the wind

    What fury unleashed
    Has disguised the passions of steel and concrete
    A culture of the wretched
    To lay waste its own pitiful theater
    And through the eye of a needle
    See
    A million angels
    Speared upon a pin head








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