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    dots Submission Name: Daddydots
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    Author: Devilinaskirt
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    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       A Poem I wrote when I was angry about losing my father I was 20 when he died, he was 50..


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    TO MY FATHER, MY SAVIOR, MY LOSS.11/1/97
    I miss the ever loudness of your
    voice,The breath leaves me,I need
    you here.A sudden day,an endless
    night. I should have,would have,
    or could have. All gone. The
    darkness over whelms me.I call
    him to this earth to face me.
    He doesn't come. WHY? Does he hear
    me? I call to all the angles in a
    voice so deprived, so incohearant.Dont
    leave me alone.I am empty now. He
    escapes the tunnels of my mind.I
    can't hear the world,the pain consumes
    me. A farewell and a sad kiss from his
    lips I would give a world of riches for.Today, the day of all days.
    The ending of me. The errupting tears stream
    my pink cheek.I love you more then
    myself, and I miss you more then being
    in your arms the last time.


    Doddi L Goordman




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