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Author: silencingscream
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Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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louder than words
screams piercing the silence

he was right
judged he was

in love he wasn't
cold was his heart

he'd been broken
he'd been crushed

never knowing
until now

how much pain
he'd really endured

i love you my brother
i love you my family


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