Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Hellodots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 742
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 495



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHellodots
    -------------------------------------------


    I have never done this before
    But I am loving it more and more
    Everyday with you is like summer rain
    Cool at night, warm during the day

    You had me at hello
    Fell in love at first sight
    A voice so calm and mellow
    I wanted you that night

    I want to be with you forever more
    See what our lives have in store
    Dreaming of the day you are with me
    Living life so precious, open, and so free

    S.H.




    Submitted on 2010-05-17 08:37:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      It is very sweet- falling in love it has a schoolboy romance vibe to it. (Only meaning that it points out the purer, or more innocent aspects of love.) I rather liked it, it went together nicely and even though it has that corney little phrase in it, it fit.
    | Posted on 2010-05-19 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    185095

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    One Day written by WriteSomething
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Alone in the Crowd written by SavedDragon
    written by Daniel Barlow
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    untitled written by Chelebel
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Fasade written by jackz
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Linger written by saartha
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Giving written by jjd

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry