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    dots Submission Name: Hellodots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/807/391
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHellodots
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    I have never done this before
    But I am loving it more and more
    Everyday with you is like summer rain
    Cool at night, warm during the day

    You had me at hello
    Fell in love at first sight
    A voice so calm and mellow
    I wanted you that night

    I want to be with you forever more
    See what our lives have in store
    Dreaming of the day you are with me
    Living life so precious, open, and so free

    S.H.




    Submitted on 2010-05-17 08:37:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is very sweet- falling in love it has a schoolboy romance vibe to it. (Only meaning that it points out the purer, or more innocent aspects of love.) I rather liked it, it went together nicely and even though it has that corney little phrase in it, it fit.
    | Posted on 2010-05-19 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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