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    dots Submission Name: The Revelation of Vinesdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Revelation of Vinesdots
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    The bruised and battered grapes of the heart
    Press a bitter wine to the lips
    A quiet whisper of choice

    Formula for the long lonely nights to pass
    Mulling on every burning piquant
    But still tasteless, droll
    For the whip you lay upon yourself

    And pressed you are
    Into a decanted sorrow
    As if the sweetness of tears could cleans your eyes

    Their salt to wipe away your soul

    Deep red for the season passed
    On an ink of blood
    Those parchments testimonials
    Of you, your wounded self

    And so it is
    That we should lift a cup, so full of promise
    Ere to taste the backwash of their ash

    Were you collected and pressed
    With the loving hands of tenderness
    Or even now look from the tainted glass
    And wonder, where you are

    Are you left to speak with bitter lips
    A wine
    The world, should have tasted

    And pressed you are
    Into a decanted sorrow
    As if the sweetness of tears could cleans your eyes

    Their salt to wipe away your soul





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