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When we are lovers at last


Author: wovenwords
ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108 /303 /189
Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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When we are lovers at last



Through days we floated like sailboats at sea,
The wind nudging softly at our white flaps.
The ocean was tranquil. We shone in the sun.
We, oblivious, floated on. The fish knew.
The seaweed that pasted itself to our sides:
It knew. The waves knew. Their sloshing and rocking
Thrust us forward. The fish, their gills flapping,
Gossiped, swimming along, brushing our sides.
As the sea tumbled and tossed, the large space
between us: It filled. Our shy bows tapped, and
the sea took a deep breath. The sun became
more yellow. The fish swam off in pairs.

Winter will come; storms will push us apart.
Come, my dear, throw down your anchor; your heart.




Submitted on 2010-05-17 17:35:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Whoops, I copy-pasted it weird. I would make it longer, but it's a sonnet!
| Posted on 2010-05-18 00:00:00 | by wovenwords | [ Reply to This ]
  this is beautiful! although what happened on the last line, it's like your train of thought died all of the sudden....

but other than that I thought that it was a very good piece of work... I also think that you should make it longer.... hopefully you can keep working on it.

keep writing

italkmurdoch
| Posted on 2010-05-18 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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