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    dots Submission Name: Noticed by Youdots

    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 301
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsNoticed by Youdots

    The days and nights all run together
    I don’t know how to explain this feeling
    Wanting to run find a place of my own,
    Never wanting to be still around anyone,
    Yet there still is someone that makes me stay.

    The feeling of dread every night,
    Followed by unbearable sadness in the morning
    Never wanting to get out of bed
    Spending my days looking for a reason.

    My life seems so bleak and empty,
    Do I really have a purpose inside me?
    I have lost all desire to go after my dreams,
    Yet my dreams have already faded.

    I wonder around like a hollow person,
    Wishing I could find my source of pain,
    Wanting to know why life is worth it,
    Oh please someone hear my cry.

    I know no one can hear me,
    For all I do is spend time after time,
    Within these four walls.

    No one is going to notice me,
    I have already faded into life
    I’m not sure I recognize,
    Who this broken girl is any more
    All the ones who said they’d be there,
    Well I look around and find no one.

    Each day I see myself slipping,
    Knowing I have a love for which,
    I fear I will get another broken heart.
    I see myself falling down faster and faster.

    Every day he goes unnoticed by all except one,
    But the one that see’s him, he doesn’t see.
    The best guy in the world is broken hearted,
    And I fear by the time he does see me,
    Well I’ll be gone.

    Already in my head are plans,
    Going away and no one will notice.
    I wish these tears would stop falling,
    Once and for all I just want to be noticed by you.

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