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    dots Submission Name: Deux ex Machinadots
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    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    dotsDeux ex Machinadots
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    just stop explaining to me what you know of lips touching. stop telling me of the beating of hearts. i know more than youd imagine. ive felt it in the dark like a living being. close to my bones. inescapable, as if youd wish to escape. the moonlight dripping in like a salve to the conscience.

    the marrow expanding. the glorious future we expected. a perversity forced upon us by ambition. teach me the stars by numbering the matrices of your indescribable pupils. teach me the the lies everyone else told you. so i can strive never to lie again.

    let me learn the shape of our bodies together, against the dusklight that we will never notice.let us blacken the dawn with our ideaolgies. let us praise the discrepancies of man with our dyspeptic tendencies. let us grow weary of the irritation of social animalism.

    and my eyes..... they read numbers. they say things i never want to say. spill words onto pages i never wanted to exist. tell people of thing. against their will. make truth seem irrational by the verbiage, to many words, not like the touch of skin. not like eyes in the dark. not like it should be.

    silvous plait? have you never put monstrous words in a place in which they do not belong. Emberassed people by your incapability to not lie in public. or are you a good liar? a good citizen? do you keep your love hidden beneath the darkest of lies? Just so it can breathe.....




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      Wooow!! Ok my initial shock is out the way as much as I'm ADHD(selectively..not really) I truly loved this and jumped up and down on the verbage alone. After that little stint I then realized how much I understood every line...not be the norm for they are killing our essence well that is what I took from it..Kudos Fricking Kudos
    | Posted on 2010-05-19 00:00:00 | by Dutchess_aira | [ Reply to This ]


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