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    dots Submission Name: The Imagedots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 555
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    Description:
       Rhyming ABAAB format, eight syllables per line.

    This is a poem about the image of God, which is love


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    dotsThe Imagedots
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    In endless emanation's spread,
    beyond all words, and worlds apart,
    the image cast on dusty bed
    exhaled one life through Spirit fed,
    and filled with joy one beating heart.

    In love, at long-last bona fide,
    above the surface of the deep,
    love drew an image from his side,
    in partnership, a friend and bride
    arose this morn from even sleep.

    And when the garden gate was barred,
    love surely found an open door.
    Relentless retributions marred
    the image, once impaled and scarred
    to rise, in love, and love once more.




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