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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/623/381
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    I do all I can
    For how long I ask you?
    I keep going, my days never ending
    Mondays always seem to run into Tuesday's
    For how long I ask you?
    Am I in the mists of building my life?
    Or am I simply kidding myself

    I beg you ...

    ELAIN THIS TO ME

    I feel as if I am only going in circles

    A dog chasing its tail
    A mouse in a maze
    ... A dog chasing its tail

    A pathetic human being I am if anything at all
    I wear my feelings on my sleeve more and more
    I am a battered beaten brused soul..

    trying to find its way home...




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      Ah I have felt this way before. Life becoming monotonous, and pointless.... but I wouldn't think about it too much. When you focus on something for too long you begin to burn a hole in your brain.... just fill your life with things that you like. Because the honest to goodness truth is that it'll never end. That life will continue to seem like it's going in circles until something interesting happens, then it'll feel like your going forward.... then it'll return to going in circles... lol it's a never ending thing. So just keep yourself busy and happy.
    | Posted on 2010-05-28 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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