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    dots Submission Name: It's sleeplessdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIt's sleeplessdots
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    It’s sleepless, in the runny night
    It shifts and drinks its borders,
    I stick my eye out from behind
    My pillow: it blinks, blindsided,
    And I am drenched in moonlight.

    Oh let me eat out from you hand,
    Like a trusting dumb mare,
    And sniff –sniff! Sniff! –
    The smell of quivering horizons.

    Oh can’t you hear all the desperation
    Spelled out letters, distracted,
    Into the hungry mouths of the universe,
    Adagio, my friend, bereft of
    Staggering compromise.

    The bells, the bells, the bells!
    Deep sunken eyes, from sleepless
    Night ravings about a missing
    Black raven of a madwoman:
    Would you be the one to put me to sleep,
    Eye for eye, and lash to lash,
    Which weave softly to the sultry
    Vineyards of the south,
    Blinking, yawning under the lazy sun,
    Where no blood spilt for a thousand years?




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    ||| Comments |||
      I wonder if while my muse was missing
    she was hanging out at your house?
    This is so much like something I would
    write that it scares me.

    I want to say more about your work but I
    so like what you have done with the place
    I do not want you to change a thing.
    Which means all that is left for me
    is to sit back and enjoy the ride.
    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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