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    dots Submission Name: Wishing is Pointlessdots
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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 656
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    Description:
       okay I'm trying to get out of the rhyming phase although this was a well written poem.... so I had to post it to see what people thought. Be honest, don't sugar coat things, and have enough respect for the poet to say it like it is. But please refrain from vulgar remarks lol


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    dotsWishing is Pointlessdots
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    life is no mystery
    no puzzles no locks
    it's actually quite simple
    like a little brown box

    occupy till He comes,
    love because we're loved
    eventually it all ends
    and our bodies turn to crumbs

    it's much easier to forget
    it takes to much pain to remember
    like today was Monday
    and my birthday's in November

    we wish and we wish
    till there's no stars left in the sky
    we learn from our mistakes
    but yet we still cry

    we expect the impossible
    but realize the worst
    wishing is pointless
    we're still gonna thirst




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