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    dots Submission Name: Upon your face and facedots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsUpon your face and facedots
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    Blood-perished marble sings
    forsaken rhapsodies of old
    and brings back, once again,
    the kings and queens and bitter questions
    of human conscience
    to life,

    which night would cover.

    Away! Away with looming crows,
    and breathless, vociferous
    above the icy stillness -
    the taking back of each and every word:

    Beguiling me to gracefully surrender
    to river upon river,
    misty-eyed,

    To where the thousand skies
    are filtered into thousand kisses,
    to where the fading shivers
    of a candlelight
    upon your face and face are
    but a passing.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I have a dark mind therefore be so
    kind as to let me interpret this in a dark
    vein.

    Blood-perished marble in my world is
    white with a red stain. It also could
    symbolize a vampire. In this case follow
    that vein of reasoning an old vampire.

    This point is inferred by your reference
    of kings and queens. He is no longer
    human so his conscience is covered by
    the night.
    He comes in darkness preceded
    by omen of crow, preternatural calm
    and eldritch magic.
    He has enthralled you
    and bid you join with him on a never-ending
    journey.
    A journey of limitless night skies
    and unending passion.
    You are now and forever face to face
    partners burning but a single candle
    against the
    night.
    | Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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