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Upon your face and face


Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
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Words: 96
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Upon your face and face



Blood-perished marble sings
forsaken rhapsodies of old
and brings back, once again,
the kings and queens and bitter questions
of human conscience
to life,

which night would cover.

Away! Away with looming crows,
and breathless, vociferous
above the icy stillness -
the taking back of each and every word:

Beguiling me to gracefully surrender
to river upon river,
misty-eyed,

To where the thousand skies
are filtered into thousand kisses,
to where the fading shivers
of a candlelight
upon your face and face are
but a passing.




Submitted on 2010-05-24 23:51:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I have a dark mind therefore be so
kind as to let me interpret this in a dark
vein.

Blood-perished marble in my world is
white with a red stain. It also could
symbolize a vampire. In this case follow
that vein of reasoning an old vampire.

This point is inferred by your reference
of kings and queens. He is no longer
human so his conscience is covered by
the night.
He comes in darkness preceded
by omen of crow, preternatural calm
and eldritch magic.
He has enthralled you
and bid you join with him on a never-ending
journey.
A journey of limitless night skies
and unending passion.
You are now and forever face to face
partners burning but a single candle
against the
night.
| Posted on 2011-01-01 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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