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    dots Submission Name: trophy u think u rdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 334
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
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    who da fuk r u bitch
    all up on my shit
    how bout i wana fukn kill myself
    how bout i dont wanna think these thots no more
    how bout instead of everyone worryin bout me
    all da time it could jus b over wit already
    i feel ugly
    no one would dare to fuck wit me
    a hideous beast beyond ur dreams
    behind these eyes
    there is a mind full of lies
    cries
    n too many failed tries
    it feels like a failed life
    the knife i struggle wit
    barey touches da skin
    as i hesitate where i begin
    u bring out a passion in me
    i didnt know was there any more
    n yet u barely know i exist
    n i think i love you more than da world
    ur my one da one i dream of at at night
    im alone
    whether or not ur wit me
    u play so hard dat i dont even want u
    ur ugly ur rude
    n i cant stand to want u
    i dont wana flaunt u
    like da trophy dat u think u r
    ur nothin but a whore
    i hate u
    n im not ready to walk thru dat door
    into another demension
    dat neither one of us knows
    i might go crazy
    i might jus kill u for no reason known to anyone but us
    n who r u to tell me dat im wrong
    or anyone
    i wouldnt have done it if i didnt believe it was right
    it was war
    u made me do dis
    u made me believe it was wat it was
    n i almost understood ur reasonin behind it
    but then again
    in da end
    whos gon really b da one
    who won




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      hey and hi this has some ... d up meaning i no its venting and all but the suicide thing is a bit over the edge but all in all a good vent

    sandman
    | Posted on 2010-05-25 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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