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    dots Submission Name: Wardots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 432
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Its all kind of uncertain in form, mirroring the uncertainty of life. I'm pretty confident this is all intentionally awkward unless there is something I have missed. There is more here than words. Most of this parallels in meaning from line to line but all of the meaning I have found still arrives in some form to the same conclusion. The title shouldn't be considered until the conclusion and should only be there as an after thought.

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    she is alone in this city
    holding on
    she knows time is permitting
    holding on

    watching sky
    never fade away
    and even the night
    permits the day

    eyes awake
    how can she see
    turning pages

    carrying on

    she's walked and dined and prayed to apollo
    touched achilles heel
    and now its an arrow
    and a golden compass shot through her heart

    she won't pass away
    she's touching the sky
    and as the night turns to day
    faith turns to fight

    Submitted on 2010-05-25 06:25:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      she's walked and dined and prayed to apollo
    touched achilles heel
    and now its an arrow
    and a golden compass shot through her heart

    how about if instead this stanza read more like this?

    she has walked dined and prayed to Apollo
    The arrow that pierced Achilles heel
    now pierces her own heart
    transforming a blood filled pump
    into a golden compass

    | Posted on 2010-12-27 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]

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