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Away Message Whore


Author: Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:    33/M/NY
Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 190 /194 /45
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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This poem was a bit forced. I wanted to write a little ditty about reading all the away messages, and I like the term "away message whore." I think it needs more, but on the other hand maybe not. I don't think it has good enough quality to be made any longer. Let me know what you think. (This is one of those ones that I wouldn't normally make public, but I'm trying to open up a bit so go crazy with it!)


Away Message Whore



Whenever I come home and sit
before the glowing screen,
My eyes drift swiftly rightwards,
forward in my chair I lean.

I read the away messages.
I am an away message whore.
These AOL invented and
had me in mind for sure.

Down my buddy list I scroll.
For every yellow square,
click on Info to read what
each person has to share.

Some people think I'm obsessive-compulsive;
some call me a bore.
But I just like to read away messages.
I am an away message whore.




Submitted on 2004-07-25 13:19:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow. i ...do that too. but i'm not a wh*re. You're so weird dude. WEIRD. Hmmm...you have a way of capturing everyday crap that we don't even think about, i wonder what your 'normal' thoughts are. Who cares if ppl call you a bore? you aren't at elite!
| Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
  lol nice this was funny i really enjoyed reading this the title really is what drew me in to even look at it you have good work keep it up
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by Beccaboo | [ Reply to This ]
  owo what a cool poem i though it was funny yet different i hadent read anything like this befor this one add more detail
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by kLaDeeDa | [ Reply to This ]
  hahhaa i loved it.. excellent.. it sound like me.. except on msn.. its excellent
i loved the rhyming.. really catchy.. lots of poems bore me.. this one drew me in
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by nanki_c | [ Reply to This ]
  This is rather funny and I enjoyed reading it. I only read some of my friends away messages when I'm on AOL. The only line I didn't get was this one,
"These AOL invented and
had me in mind for sure."
Shouldn't the 'and' be taken out there? That is the only thing I didn't get. I have a saying that I'm a 'Dance Whore' because I can't get enough of dancing. This was very clever. Great job.
--blt
| Posted on 2004-07-25 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]


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