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    dots Submission Name: The Spilldots
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    Author: RisingSon
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    It would be so beautiful
    on a canvas
    or in a dream
    where it might stay hidden forever



    (AP Photo/Eric Gay)




    Submitted on 2010-05-25 12:32:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In other words:

    "not in reality"

    yes, agreed. very much agreed.

    Disturbing, isn't it? Just in every way.

    This is great, James. Quite stirring and concise. Well-executed is the term I'm looking for....

    -Emeya
    | Posted on 2010-05-27 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, simple, stirring, effective.

    It reminds me of an issue of Newsweek I just picked up. 100 Places to Remember ~ Before They Disappear.

    It is the ultimate irony that something so destructive could be so beautiful.
    | Posted on 2010-05-25 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]
      You've brilliantly summed up the whole mess, imho.
    I mourn the lost workers, the birds and other wildlife, and the coastal flora.
    But, the image of the root of the problems is fascinating; beautiful.
    Odd how that works.


    Your words work wonderfully with the image.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2010-05-25 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really thought-provoking and resonant and masterfully succinct. This conveys, for me, the beauty of an oil spill, a picture you don't want to be real, but which in a fantasy setting -a canvas or dream - would be exquisite. I think the only thing I'd change are your two "its" since you can make your poem far more imagistic by denoting what the "it" is. On the other hand, if you want the poem to remain amorphous like a dream, then the "it" is probably apt.
    | Posted on 2010-05-25 00:00:00 | by Speacenik | [ Reply to This ]


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