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Weeping Eyes of a Girl Unwanted


Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 307
Class/Type: Poetry /What you did
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Weeping Eyes of a Girl Unwanted



A little girl is born
to a family full of hate
The doctor has to cut her out
cause she is far to late
The doctor holds her out
for the parents both to see
But the father looked disgusted
that the baby is a she

* * *

About five years have passed
and that baby is now a child
She's crying in the corner
instead of with her little sister running wild
Mommy has left
she's into something called drugs
And daddy doesn't love her
her sister is the only one he hugs

* * *

Now she is thirteen
and those tears she still crys
Her father's gotten worse
and her mother no longer tries
Her eye is big and bruised,
swollen almost shut
And her arm is slightly scabbed
the remainder of a week old cut

* * *

Eighteen she is now
and she will not take it anymore
She's sick of him calling her "bitch"
and "Satan's little whore"
The time has come to live her life
and show her parents she can do it
She will not let them hurt her
and she'll never again be hit.

Finally I'll be happy
and I can dry my weeping eyes
I'll live this life with passion
for I have cut those horris ties




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  cause she is far to late

To should be too.

I like how you choose overall assessment for your best pieces for others to review from top to bottom and sometimes I believe people are either scared or lazy to even review OA requested pieces.

By the time I got to the second stanza thing get darker because it involves loneliness and favoritism:

--- She's crying in the corner
instead of with her little sister running wild

--- And daddy doesn't love her
her sister is the only one he hugs

The side theme is a timeline, going from period to period in life span.Flash joint to how you reflect things people barely remember, like your baby years.

The last two stanzas: I see in the character a thirst for independence and a hunger to prove wrongful ones wrong.
My interpretation is that this is a fight poem, tired of hell, done with hell now let's shoot for heaven and get the glory after being victimized in a sad parental way.

The reader has to ways two look at this.You can look at the girls viewpoint and you can look deeper into the folly behavior of the parents.
You write your own reality and never plan to hide what you've been through and that's something to be respected.

But then I say, one before me probably couldn't give any feedback because they felt this poem is too personal to give any opinion.
That's on them then.

After all the bull you suffer through you become thorough, to handle pain, year after year.You can handle triumph when it finally arrive after you persevering.
| Posted on 2011-04-13 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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