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    dots Submission Name: untimely harvestdots

    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 438
    Class/Type: Story/
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       A pedophile school teacher meets the grimm reaper

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    dotsuntimely harvestdots

    The world tilted, and came rushing into his eyes
    as the ground wrapped him.
    his dazed eyes met hollowness and cold stared him.
    slowly it made sense;
    he knew this was none other than the Taker
    and his time was now.
    his lips contorted in a sneer
    " so now you deem it fit to put an end to this
    existence I fooled myself into calling life, to retrieve me from my foolery of wanton lust.

    When embolden by truth and conscience I went about aright, you cold cloaker. Wickedly let me be
    just when my hand had grown fond of destroying- that which I built,my friend thou cold bringer left me still
    when I personified lust and chased skirts fiercely
    drank my fill and even those of persons unborn.

    Even as I Corrupted my conscience with defiling of the underage, who only desired to learn at my feet,
    -little ones I was commissioned to teach,
    their innocence I strained to reach,
    stealing and guzzling their pristine nature
    I had these youngsters liberally

    Ah! so now I die never to atone...pray do tell- the cause of me very death? for all I know i fell, why?
    Cold-hearted to where goeth us?

    For how long have you prowled the earth in this job of yours? for time infinitum?
    for me no legacy,no life story worthy of mention,

    with me very hands I erased my claim to fame. for me,... me very pride is shame!
    do tell amongst those thou hast cruelly seized, has there been any, of worst character,...please say many.

    Cold stare, be not carried away by these people that wail as they rush me off to medical aid.they cry now but that is to be expected but soon rejoice at me exit,another excuse for a gathering
    not all who gather are friends ,sympathizers some gather because there is a gathering!
    I pray they forget my sinner ways , my conscience dumb days.

    cold Taker,cold dead eyes,soulless since time immemorial...
    sorry dear death did you say you will send me back?
    kind sir I choose not to go back if my limbs are broken or my body is incapacitated...
    what life will i live?! Even if I return to right my wrongs.

    His eyes traced the motions of the cold one's dance


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      I love how you used the word "wanton". It is so rarely used, and deserves better lol. I thought that it was very well written, but I must apologize and say that I didn't quite get it. Maybe I need more coffee, but could you maybe explain? lol

    keep writing

    | Posted on 2010-05-28 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]

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