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    dots Submission Name: Unknown Jealousydots
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    Author: RisingSon
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 7/79/52
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 580
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       Feeling pro-lif-ic today. Mind the gaps.

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    dotsUnknown Jealousydots
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    jealous of the unknown
    and rise to me
    in such fashion and sleep deprived anxiety
    i call you
    into and out of these thoughts
    these dreams
    these moments of introspective summoning
    selfish
    that elixir of reason I know best
    still you rise
    like ashes spawned in the deepest
    most secret parts of this volcano heart
    into the heights of glorious sunlies
    still you rise and fall
    back into the oceans of self-deceit
    and I lie
    and I lay
    for wishing you away is wishing these dreams to be
    another stonewall storm break
    and there is no retreat
    there are locks
    doors and windows
    still there is no closet nor attic nor roof to bear
    the weight of imperfect wanderings
    you are there
    the shadow of my thought-
    less lies
    you are here
    the outline of periphery
    crossed lines of spatial reckoning
    here the fault-mines shudder

    and dust falls from above
    in here
    there are only the possibilities
    ore of simple serenaded satire
    not real
    yet still you rise
    still I fall
    back
    again
    into reality




    Submitted on 2010-05-27 17:49:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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