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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       My first attempt at a non rhyming poem! I don't know if it's good or not (ugh) so I would really appreciate some feedback/advice.... Please!


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    dotsBrandeddots
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    I remember the fire
    the warm enticing flame
    how warm it was close to the skin...
    it felt so good in comparison to the harsh cold
    but as it got closer, the true nature of the flame was revealed....
    clasping my heart... the pain was disorienting
    but looking at the wound
    seeing what had happened
    what used to be a clean pure heart
    was now charred, branded










    Submitted on 2010-05-27 22:04:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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