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    dots Submission Name: Graciousnessdots
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    Author: colbybradshaw
    ASL Info:    24,deep south, u.s
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 19/19/29
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 402
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsGraciousnessdots
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    The blood red moon,
    the low lying descendant of fission,
    cresting the heavy clouds,
    pregnant with rains,
    heat lightning and the pangs of birth,
    a storm in the distance,
    your eyes the only thing illuminated,
    incandescent,
    a controlled explosion coming through these,
    the beautiful cavities,
    leaving me semi conscious ,
    a deprecative glance upon my brow,
    never what i imagine i look like.




    Submitted on 2010-05-28 22:03:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      To me this is a description of a brewing storm. The rain laden clouds the expression on your face like dismay? Hey I could be wrong but itsrecycled inventiveness
    Because the coming of rain is a well played feature but this got some complex simplicity lockin like. Please tell me if am wrong this is some maestro work
    | Posted on 2010-05-30 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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