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    dots Submission Name: under this starless skydots

    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       my little brother hanged himself a week ago

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    dotsunder this starless skydots

    Under this starless sky, I sit and contemplate,
    This weeks suicide, cannot just be fate.
    I saw my brother about an hour before he died,
    I hugged him as he sobbed, he couldnt look me in my eyes.

    Shit man the babys cryingill be back I said,
    I would have never left him if I knew in an hour hed be dead,
    I heard my other brother yell "Mikey hanged himself"
    and I flew down the stairs like a bat out of hell.

    the garage was loked so I broke down the door,
    I ran and pulled the noose off him and laid him on the floor.
    I pushed on his chest as I screamed mikey No,
    and I kissed your cold skin, as I begged you not to go.

    I can not see anything, I am so blinded with tears,
    I see you hanging, when I try to see the good years,
    I feel so exhausted, and you have only been gone for a week,
    any future happiness for me now seems so bleek.

    Under this starless sky, I try to contemplate,
    all of this sadness has turned to rage and hate.
    I feel like getting even with everyone who ever caused you pain,
    I now live in a dark place for the insain.

    Submitted on 2010-05-28 23:16:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's a horrible, horrible thing to see the one you love slip away. My best condolances.
    I hope writing this piece made you feel better.
    Black Rose.
    | Posted on 2010-06-01 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Heart Breaking. May the Lord be with you and your family in your grief. I lost my brother from a plane crash 10 years ago. It is a unreal experience to lose someone so
    close, you can lose all sense of reality. It is also, the time
    to seek out God, for he will pour his Grace upon you.

    Love of Christ,
    | Posted on 2010-05-30 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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