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Two Many Things To Say


Author: istalkmurdoch
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Words: 177
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This poem kind of morphed from one thing to another, and I really like how it turned out.


Two Many Things To Say



Thank you for the struggles
without them I would have never grown
thank you for all the tears
without them I would have never known

thank you for all the answers
without them I would have been confused
thank you for all the good people
without them I would have been used

than you for the truth you give me
without it I wouldn't see the lies
thank you for your never ending love
my heart and yours are tied

thank you for every day
that I count as a gift
for all the troubles
to you I lift

I never will understand
why I feel so much pain
because you already did
so mine is in vain

you took the pain
every lash to your back
you have more strength
strength is what I lack

lift me up
break me down
mold me today
I see your wondrous crown

I am unworthy
I know this is true
so all I can say
is thank you




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