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Submission Name: Bad Nights dots

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Author:	istalkmurdoch
Elite Ratio:	7.06 - 129/48/25
Words:	108

Class/Type:	Poetry/Dark
Total Views:	665
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	734

Description:
last stanza is like lacking something
I wrote this on a whim
although I did something naughty
this piece of work is what I would like to call
"Vomit Poetry"
I kind of vomited it out...
tell me what you think lol

Bad Nights dots

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Right when you're about to fall asleep
those thoughts come to just wake you up
today you failed
today you won
tomorrow you'll stay
tomorrow you'll run

you fall asleep
those dreams come just to make you sad
what happened before can never go away
don't worry tomorrows a new day
dreams aren't usually happy
they are predictably sappy

you wake up
that sun is up just to cheer you up
today truly a new day
but I'm afraid it will not stay

day will turn dark
dark will turn to fright
and I will continue to sleep
through the eternally sad night

Submitted on 2010-05-30 23:49:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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not all nights are sad, and the good thing about the night is that theirs always a dawn that follows it. good write
| Posted on 2010-12-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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