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    dots Submission Name: The Atrocity Known As FormSpringdots
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    Author: istalkmurdoch
    Elite Ratio:    7.06 - 129/48/25
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 549
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1636



    Description:
       I got pretty corny in some parts and I know that there are rough spots, but I would like some writing feedback/ opinions.

    hehehe ^_^


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    dotsThe Atrocity Known As FormSpringdots
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    This isn't a joke
    this site isn't okay
    I just saw about 3 people
    make an account today

    they make it because
    all they want is attention
    but they don't realize the truth
    that I would like to mention

    you can't tell who they are
    but they hurt you all the same
    ask you questions, telling you lies
    you'll never know their name

    is so sad to watch
    people get put down
    just on the other side of the screen
    the abuser wears a crown

    they try to cover it up
    by returning a cruel word
    but that isn't going to help
    believing it will is simply absurd

    just delete the stupid thing
    get back to your life
    which you lived on facebook
    even there we find strife

    don't count on the internet
    to tell you who you are
    don't count on that guy
    that lives really far

    if you want real answers
    from a good honest friend
    just ask it to their face
    they should comprehend

    people have lost social skills
    why care when we have this?
    a world with people without faces
    the real people I don't even miss!

    no! Stop!
    right there where you are!
    these people are just lies
    who live all afar!

    talk to your neighbor
    your dog, what ever happened to mothers?
    get out of your house
    talk to your brothers!









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    ||| Comments |||
      Somehow came by this.

    You know, FormSpring has a new competitor? ask.fm, it is.

    Formspring was bought out by some other company that's been using user details for shell accounts. It's all very dodgy.

    FS is gone, ask.fm is still up. It's all the same. Anonymity gives power. People are ruthless.
    | Posted on 2016-09-27 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]


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