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    dots Submission Name: thunder on the rightdots
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    Author: Shadowstar13
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 191/191/129
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       So I paraphrased Hamlet. So shoot me.


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    I die under these summer storms
    a failed nepenthe,
    reason reborn.

    I come back as the falling sky
    revives me with the phoenix-cry
    flashing ashes unveil me
    all alive

    This is I we scream
    this is me
    more heaven and earth
    than your philosophy

    a wild beat drives my mind to dance
    my crone's roots never had a chance
    unabashed as they clashed, the titans of the western shore
    and the westbound wind

    it was as before

    the rebirth rhythm, laughter divine
    bless the grass and caress the line
    tears tease the trees without blame
    the sky above blushes - but not from shame

    this is the life i've been waiting for

    this is the breath, the broken door
    the gate-frame held open
    like a lute composer's unwritten score

    so the phoenix is reborn




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      Good work daughter Thunder of the Night (of Hamlet). I like it and is really inspiring. Keep it up. Joachim
    | Posted on 2010-06-01 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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