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    dots Submission Name: Summer Snowdots

    Author: RisingSon
    Elite Ratio:    1.69 - 7/79/52
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSummer Snowdots

    The tears seem so odd
    like summer snow
    falling in a sandstorm.

    I sit and watch
    unable to think anything
    aside from I donít know.

    How strange they are
    when they grace my fingers;
    and I am the sheepskin.

    I am the sandstorm
    infinite in grain.

    I will batter the shelters
    and carry away
    every last trace
    of us.

    Submitted on 2010-06-02 10:03:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think my one line comments have come to an end.
    This was absolutely genius. You're really grinding your teeth for sparks of creative ingenuity and you've finally broke through the enamel. I [censored] love this. It's so damn visual. James, you're a really great writer. Take advantage of that.
    | Posted on 2010-06-02 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]

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