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An Invitation.

Author: edcherry
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An exercise in internal rhyme. To show that I, as a scorpio stinger also have a soft centre like a good chocolate. Yassah!

An Invitation.

An Invitation.

Oh, please join me 'neath this lilac tree,
for a nice quiet chat about this and that,
to while away this care-free day,
and rest our feet, from the pavement heat

You could rhyme with me a poem or three,
dreaming up words about singing birds,
or the waves of sea, ever-rolling and free,
as we muse for a while, poetise and smile.

You could share with me my thermos of tea,
and half the lunch I bought on a hunch,
of passing girls, the one with blonde curls
would see it was fit to join me and sit.

Oh, please - oh please join me 'neath this tree
with love in your heart for literary art,
where poems of loves match cooing of doves,
and tensions all cease, in the blessings of peace.

Submitted on 2010-06-02 22:49:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  aww I wanted to be the first to comment, but alas. I was too slow.....

So you would like to know what I think about your poem? I simply love it (I added it to my faves), and I really like how you rhymed. I honestly can say that I've never seen that rhythm of rhyme. I haven't been around as much poetry as I would like. I loved how you used flowers also, I love lilacs, the way they look, their sweet smell that never ceases to capture me every time I smell it, and the fact that you include your love of poetry. If you would, please make a poem about morning glories, and sweet peas. They are my favorite flowers :P besides lilac and dogwood.

Also, I would love to join you under your tree, and enjoy the blessings of peace. I haven't been able to enjoy peace in a long time. This poem gave me a taste of so many things that make me happy. Thank you for writing such a wonderful piece. I'm sorry that I didn't have anything bad to say :)

Keep Doing What You're Doing


| Posted on 2010-06-03 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]

sing song your life away, sweet singing bird
beauty and grace, was the song that i heard
dream away or sing all day, either works just fine
humming birds hum words while playing with the flies
they found a place that was safe from the spider
made friends with some men, who torched it with a lighter
never felt the fright again and went along their flight
guided by the fireflies that set blaze the night


there are trees
i see three
one is red, one is brown
there are leaves
ten indeed
scattered round-bout the ground
there are scenes
that I've seen
some with glowing orbs of light
but of all these
my favorite to see
are the suns breaking the moonlight

Whatever you please

not really sure, i was invited for a game
try to be internalized in a literal way
might have made a blunder two
or 3 or four i am not sure
thanks for the invitation,
i've been making
excuses all

(that was the worlds most fun comment, thanks for setting it up that way, it was fairly awesome of you.)
also i hope we get some other people to join in, like in any way, even minis or haiku's because some group participation could do this place good.
| Posted on 2010-06-02 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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