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    dots Submission Name: Raineggdots

    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 55/98/57
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I am a little girl
    and i found a rain egg
    i kept it under my pillow
    and it hatched
    and then we fell in love
    i don't know if it's a boy or a girl
    because only something with estrogen would decide to liquidify itself for a prolonged period -
    but then again rain could be god's runny snot
    in which case
    it is definitely a boy.

    the other day i saw my lover rain
    on the news
    cheating on me with south india
    when i asked why he/she was late
    for our date
    it lied and said something
    about hating how predictable everyone thought it was.

    are so complicated.

    we broke up
    coz i grew out of my gumboots
    you can't ask someone to come again
    when at best all it did was tease you
    plus the other day rainegg got all hung up on explaining to me how a drain works
    it was gross and i hate it now
    i've had enough please

    i don't particulary miss rainegg
    but i miss some things like
    the paperboats.
    Don't tell it but i wanted to have a rainegg baby at one point
    but i was scared of the sky cramps.

    so now i have a test tube rain egg
    which i will keep under my pillow
    for those dry spells
    when i'm short of drama in real life

    i hear thunder

    Submitted on 2010-06-03 03:47:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow! thats very nice!!!!

    i like that keep-it-simple-lines! the start was very good,
    immensely interesting and you got that chemistry thing going pretty well till near the end, where i thought it sagged down jus a tiny little bit. but its a very sweet poem...

    n i could sort of connect with that cuz im from hyderabad n i know what you meant about that south india...
    | Posted on 2010-06-03 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]

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