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    dots Submission Name: Here I Am Againdots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 399
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    dotsHere I Am Againdots
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    Here i am again
    Home alone, Razorblade in hand,
    Thinking of ways to say goodbye,
    Trying To Show them Things will Be Alright.

    I can taste the blood in my mouth,
    For I am Already Dieing,
    If I Told Them all I Love Them,
    I wouldnt be lieing.

    I Press the Blade into pale skin,
    Hopeing they can forgive me,
    For the way it had to end.

    My Breaths are growing shallow,
    As tears fall down my face,
    The blood on my tongue I Swallow,
    For me It is way to late.

    I Lower myself to the floor,
    I close my swollen eyes.
    So when my family sees me,
    Less of their heart dies.

    Feeling Colder now,
    Then Ever have I been.
    I know im getting closer,
    And closer to the end.

    As I Take These final breaths,
    I will say it with a Sigh,
    I Love You All Forever,
    Now Everything Will Be Alright.




    Submitted on 2010-06-04 00:12:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...i'm not even sure what to say to that. it was really good moved me and i could relate to feeling this was the only way out of things. i feel so sad for the person in the poem and just wish i could tell them everything will be alright. i think you did a really good job on this.

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    | Posted on 2010-06-06 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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